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Hi Amelia I liked your cross country story. the story was very well writen with lots of god information. you could have added how you felt and what place you come and you could add some more sensers like mouth eyes taste.
Hi amelia I liked your cross country story. Your cross country story had lots of good information and detail. But you could of add how you were feeling and what place you got.You could add more detail to your cross country story.
Kia ora, Amelia it's Ilish here from Karoro School. I really liked your cross country story it reminded me of when we did cross country this year. Thank you for sharing your work with me :) Ka Kite
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Hi Amelia
ReplyDeleteI liked your cross country story. the story was very well writen with lots of god information. you could have added how you felt and what place you come and you could add some more sensers like mouth eyes taste.
Hi Leyton Thanks for replying to me I like the way you suggested your ideas Amelia
DeleteHi amelia
ReplyDeleteI liked your cross country story. Your cross country story had lots of good information and detail. But you could of add how you were feeling and what place you got.You could add more detail to your cross country story.
Hi Sam thank you for replying to me I felt really cold once we finished the race and i felt tired Amelia
DeleteKia ora, Amelia it's Ilish here from Karoro School. I really liked your cross country story it reminded me of when we did cross country this year. Thank you for sharing your work with me :) Ka Kite
ReplyDeleteHi llish thank you for replying to me.
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